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In the cold, crisp,
Winter darkness,
In the infant snow,
She leaves her trace.

Her crimson cheeks,
Distinct, against her pale skin,
Her dark hair,
Contrasting, against her pallid face.

Her blood red lips,
Caressing a blood red apple,
While her frail fingers,
Flow freely, to the now tainted snow.

As the sorrow overwhelms her,
Slice,
She drips upon the snow,

The stainless steel relief,
As the knife begins to enter,
And blood and tears become one,
She is soon to be forgotten,

Or cast aside, as just another suicide.
©2004-2010 ~Mr-Mop
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Just a poem i wrote. I really like this one :D

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:iconhiraikotsuslinger101:
Dude. Awesome job.

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:iconmr-mop:
hehe thanks im trying to work on my poetic skills not just writing a poem but thinking about the techniques :)

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:iconlady-mystery:
beautiful poem, i love it. nice to read some poetry from a fellow deviant.

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:iconblacknwise:
Very tragic! well normally i don't too much attention on peotry, but this one just gets to me. You are good. Simplistic approach made it more comprehensable.

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:iconalanoakley:
What an exceptional poem. This could be used as a dose of reallity for depressed people. I shrunk at the title, but was happily surprised. You have a new stalker. haha.

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:iconmr-mop:
actually you'd probably be my only stalker, but we can recruit more :devilish:

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Mr.Mop head of Mop industries, Bring chaos and Confussion to a home near you!

Dr Joe says... Before you kill your idols, kiss them goodnight.
:iconmanicmonday:
wow that poem blew me away i love the ending


"Or cast aside, as just another suicide."

excellent i have to fav this

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:iconshaundj:
Very descriptive, a good read
:icondarklingthrush214:
Wonderful imagery. Sort of reminsicent of snow white. I especially like the last few stanzas.
:iconmr-mop:
i'm glad you picked up on the apple and the snow white ;)

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Mr.Mop head of Mop industries, Bring chaos and Confussion to a home near you!

Dr Joe says... Before you kill your idols, kiss them goodnight.

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